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Finally getting a chance to read since the 0.4 update, and I'm loving it! Just wanted to report a minor typo here that I found while re-reading:



There's a c instead of a q in the word consequence in the last line. 

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Thank you so much. Also, really glad you came back ;^3

Everytime i try download it says that it intafears with another file but i dont have any other files of this game and ive uninstalled and re installed it and it wont work. Please help.

Great update~ ^^, gotta love me some jelly Almond~ ;) btw, Crow is soops hot .__.

I really like the codex :) I think xou did a really good job with contriving not just a cool universe that's rich in history, but xou made it realistic UwU

It's nice to lay out the story of the world xou created, right? n_n I mean, xou go through all this trouble building a fantastical world filled with divine beings, timelines, wars, and all that jazz to make the universe seem real and alive, but xou only get to explain a small portion of xour lore when focusing on the MC's life :) so I really enjoyed the codex :p

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Omg yes! That's the reason I created it in the first place. Because there are so many little details that I want to mention and I can't do that in Eglly's story line

It's really nice :) I had to jot down an entire 10,000 year timeline for 1ne of my stories to help fit all the pieces of my universe together, so I can really appreciate the effort xou've put into xour codex UwU

Omg I can't believe I'm thirsting over another character that probably tried to kill me,  and will most likely do it again. 

Why did you make ๐˜ฉ๐˜ช๐˜ฎ that hot?!

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Haha Well, I'm glad to see so many people thirsting over a bad guy XD

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I very much appreciate the addition of the Codex!

... But I can barely read it with the current font. I tried to read the first couple of entries, but I eventually just gave up lmao. If it used the same font as the rest of the game text, I think it'd be much easier to read.

That's great as always I wait for the next update nwn

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Small issue with the MAC version you can not load from saved files, keeps starting from the beginning after a error message.

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Even after starting a new Save File? Please let me know if that's the case.

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Same issue with the saved files on Windows version unfortunately

yeah. Since I redid part of the code, it'll throw error if you try to load your saved files. The only way to fix this is to start a new safe.


So sorry about this.

Alright i do that. Thanks for the reply btw.

You're welcome buddy 

Unfortunately still have the same issue.

there is a typo in Almonds bow scene where he says bottoms instead of buttons but i think it should be left in as its funny 

Who are the romance interests? Are there romantic routes?

There are 3 romantic routes. Their names are Ikalis, Almond and Rodrick ^

How along are those routes?

They're still in progress so I can't really answer.

Have the routes been implemented yet or are they still out of the playthrough for now?

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Well, a little bit of both. The routes aren't fully implemented yet, but there are some choices to gain love points already.

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I don't even know how to put it into words, because the game is a masterpiece! Interesting story and characters. I really like your game, I will look forward to the continuation of the novel!

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i don't usually write comments  (mostly because i am not very good at it, i am better reading)  but i really liked this visual novel, specially the MC, i don't know if is because of how the story started or if i find his personality relatable to me but i felt like i cared for him and that is something that no other visual novels has made me feel for their MC. The rest is good too, the characters, story and everything but who surprised me the most was the MC.

I hope you finish this VN - Good Luck.

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Thank you so much for your good wishes! I'm really glad you liked Ehlly ^^

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Okayโ€ฆ There is too much to cover, and Iโ€™m surprised by the amount of content in this chapter. Like I said many times before, I will get into the story itself and work in some categories: Audio, Narration/writing, Art and finally eye candy. For this case since it still short I will only give an opinion, still I know it is a work from a single person with some support on other areas.

A full review will take every little thing in detail, and Iโ€™m not here for that at the moment. Done on Build: 0.04

Long story made short: I have enjoyed too much! I had a laugh that it was difficult to stop. Iโ€™m surprised by the detail and background details of each scene. Likewise, I had cried and feel the pain too. It is hard to explain, but that is sympathy at its fines. The story is well put together and viewed by our character. Some 4th wall breaking but not too extreme. Do I recommend anyone to give it a try? Absolutely, yes. ยจDonโ€™t judge a book by its cover but by its content.ยจ I was a fool now, so take it.

Audio: There is no problem so far, I say that many of them caught me by surprise by how well they fit their respective scenarios. I enjoy music and I feel their emotions if there is oneโ€ฆ In this case, I had many more emotions been powered by the songs in their scenarios. Making them memorable.

Side note: While writing this review, I have been enjoying the starting menu song.

Narration/Writing: Although I have no right to judge for writhing since English is my second language. I have to say, it is easy to understand and fast to read. The descriptions are well put together and most of them fit wonderfully together. I enjoy a good story and this one did not disappoint to even seen the end of the chapter. True, I would love to see what comes next but, for now, Iโ€™m satiated for the dissolved.

The characters are a lovely bunch, and although there is some strong imagery on some of their actions, they do fit their world well. Talking about the world, I can say, even if their concept seems simple, it is still better if it is simple because it can get complicated really fast.

Their world is wonderful travel to the unknown. Knowing them, and hearing how they survive and live, are a good point to show how much is kept in mind.

Art: Now this one is a touchy theme to talk about. First, I like to say that I sometimes judge a project for its art, but, for this one, it really caught my eye. I know it is a one-person work, and I understand that judging art is almost an insult. I do not mean any harm here, I do love how they look and how charming it is on the style. Furthermore, I know they can be refinedโ€ฆ but honestly Iโ€™m happy for it that it is a good-looking and thoughtful game. I have to give it credit, it may look out of place, but I do know that a previous judge of the art of a game got me into a hidden gem. This one is an example of why I should not judge by their art.

As for how did I view it before opening my mind? Honestly, some angles of the characters faces got me seen them a little weird. I understand it is because of perspective, that way we donโ€™t see it bad. It did distract me sometimes, but never mind that.

Eye candy: Sadly, there is none at the moment. Nowโ€ฆ by eye candy I mean theโ€ฆ Intimate kindโ€ฆ But itโ€™s no problem at all. We are starting after all. I do love to see it, but I hate it when it is rushed and never build up to it. I have seen games that just run for it. While others go for a slow approach, and I enjoy more of those. Iโ€™m here to see a Visual Novel. For a different kind of reason, I believe it needs to be build slowly if I wanted something fastโ€ฆ there are other mediums for them.

With everything being saidโ€ฆ This is all I can do for now. I hope I had given some advice and some good pointers to help and make a decision to try to enjoy the time free you may have to try this game. I will continue to update it through the builds, so thank you for reading, and thanks to the developer for creating a wonderful story.

Iโ€™m sorry I might not have any right to ask this, butโ€ฆ Is the first chapter completed right? and. How long does it take to finish reading? I want to keep this one under my watch, I have been reviewing and giving some opinions. I just want to know, since I do not know the state of the game at the moment. Since is pretty resent, I will be happy to know if it will be worth checking it out.

As for why Iโ€™m asking, it is because I have been stuck in some other VNยดs that are keeping me on my toes every time there is something interesting. If it is worth it, I will give my time to see it.

In short: give me some indicators or recommend by knowing if it is good.

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Hiya buddy. 

Well, Chapter one is 100% percent finished and it should take you around 2 or 3 hours to read the whole thing (Depends how much of a fast reader you are)

Hopefully you'll end up liking it ^^

Alright, I will check it out. And thank you for answering, I will give my opinion soon enough.

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How tall are the characters in ft? Mc, Ikalis, Almond and angry wolf knight

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Ehlly is 5"4 

Rodrick is 6"4

Almond is 5"11

Ikalis is 6"3

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I'm new here and I loved the vn










I'm guessing the mc can use both elemental and physical mana since his eyes are a combination of blue and red aka purple

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I'm glad you liked it! Welcome

Check out Home Zomewhere else, its good too. ๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚

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already played in and I loved it

The end of this update kinda hit close to home. Still great work!!! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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Am i the only one who know where the door sound came from ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚

I'm sure that more than one has noticed XD

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Sorry for being impatient. But is there a estimate for the next public release? ๐Ÿค”๐Ÿค”๐Ÿค”

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Hiya! I'm really sorry for the hold up! If all goes according to planned, patreon update should be out in a few days and the public update by the end of the month. Thank you all for your patience.

thank you for this amazing vn, all your vn is great <3

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Thank you >///<

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I only played the first ~quarter(?) of the game, but bear with me. This covers my feelings of the game as I have experienced in that time, and I have good reasons as to why I did not play further before reviewing.

(Edit: Apparently I was at the end of the public build. I was not aware of this at the time of posting- game file size fooled me into thinking the game was longer. Apologies.)

I'd say this is a great game, but sadly I can only say it's good. Unfortunately, the english is incredibly poor, making the game more frustrating than it should be to play through. I felt a lot of the events taking place towards the beginning weren't given much pretext, making a lot of it seem rather sudden. 

I also noticed the scar on MC's chest is on the incorrect side when compared to the CG showing the wound. This isn't a big deal, but once I noticed it didn't stop bugging me so I thought I'd mention it.

Overall, the characters are a solid 7.8. I just can't give them a smooth 8, as a lot of stuff they do seems (again) rather sudden at times. Some characters are very forward without obvious purpose or reason, and you could say this is just the characters themselves or me not being deep enough into the story to know yet, but it soured my time reading to the point I didn't want to progress as much. 


Once again, this is just my experience with the first quarter or so with the game. I'd overall give the game a 7.5, but I feel if these issues were addressed it would be a solid 8.5. The main problem I had was with what I could only assume to be translations. Those alone made me quit before finishing. Again, overall good game, just not as good as it could be right now. Better translations and characters would fix everything I found for the most part.

Looking forward to continuing in the future! 

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Thank you so much for your critique. I'll take it all into consideration for following updates.

While I like that you were very respectable with your opinions, I disagree that the English is incredibly poor. There are some moments that are kinda off but its good enough to understand it. ๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚

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Thank you really for your comments! It means a lot you guys ^3^

Who's everyone's favorite? Mine is Rodrick. ๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜˜๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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Almond and Ikalis (if he be less icy)

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At the end of the last public build it says "Ehlly lazy dim clothes image not found" or something close to that anyway. ๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚

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Do you really need a spoiler warning for a bug report?

I guess not, but I prefer to be cautious about revealing anything related to stuff like this. ๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚๐Ÿ™‚

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Criticisms (Spoilers ahead).




Ikalis' chapter has a bit of a information dump that became a little boring to read. I would have to say after mentioning no-mans-land between the canine and barbarian kingdoms things take a dip rather quickly. If the information is relevant to the story keep it in. But if it isn't relevant then best to not mention it at all. For example I am assuming you told us about this no-mans-land between two rivers because sooner or later either we will have to go there to conquer it or hear of news about a skirmish in there that steers the direction of the story. While it is nice to have a repository for fans to further learn the details of your world, it becomes a bit of a chore for the average reader to read through all that geography stuff in the story itself.

Almond's chapter was really cute but he literally spent no time on Ehlly. As much as I can guess he noticed the MCs excitement and ran away from an awkward situation. But I am not yet convinced he had a valid reason for bolting like that. I am just getting the vibes that the writer doesn't know how to continue this scenario and is a bit awkward himself teehee. I might be wrong though. Would have liked it a bit more if it lasted longer.

Rod's chapter was short as well, but it is a bit understandable. He doesn't like the MC much so a conversation or interacting with him that much isn't really expected. At the end of the training after we notice his scar he says that the training went okay. I think the writer needs to work on that. For example going a bit further in trying to uncover the story of the scar. I assume no one with such a bad scar will be happy to open up, so after what it appears that we annoyed Rod for him to then go and say it was "okay" makes things a little more significant. As if he is saying he is sorry for snapping at the MC or saying it was okay for him to pry and giving the hint he'd be okay about talking more about it next time.

The Princess' chapter was okay assuming she is not datable. After all Ehlly made it clear he doesnt like females that way. Not sure if it was intended, but I get the feeling she is interested in MC. At least that's the way it rubs off the way it was written. Some more details could have been added, and some more humor inserted to show her immaturity. Not that that is very important but I like your style of writing and would have enjoyed all their chapters a bit more if they had more to offer and if Ikali's chapter had some cuts with the information dump.

I don't mean to dishearten the writer, or tell them their work isn't enjoyable. It is very enjoyable! Some VNs have their own clever way of introducing all the love interests, but I prefer this style by far. It beats VNs like Echo, and even though it seemed just as short, I still felt like I learned more about the characters than I did in a similar chapter for After Class. As I said before, not sure if it was on purpose, but awkward situations are avoided instead of confronted, even when it seems more natural to confront them (like inquiring about the scar). It can still make the story go forward in a positive direction assuming there is a creative round about mentality behind the characters (like Rod wanting to open up about it to somebody, and feeling bad about getting defensive about it. After all, he wouldnt take his shirt off if he was not ready to open up about it... At least I would think that). So don't be afraid to try and create friction with some interactions. Not every confrontation had to end up with a negative outcome, and Rod seems like the one to try it on the most.

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Buddy thanks a bunch for this feedback. Means a lot to me that you took your time to write all of this, and rest assured that I'll take it into consideration. ^^ 

Also yeah, sorry to dump so much Info on Ikalis' part of the story, but it's really important that all the readers know this, because there will be many political conflicts that need this much data to make sense.

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I cried so much when they stabbed the MC, I'm so glad that wasn't the end. ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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No way! Did you actually cry? ๐Ÿ˜ข๐Ÿฅบ

I did, but that just tells you how attached I got to the MC. Good job!!! ๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿ˜ƒ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

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This is another vn where ive developed a crush on all the love interests x.x

Tbh the sprite art, characters, and current plot have been my favourites

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Wish Elly could fight back at Roderick, show that brute he's not weak and especially that Ruby and princess witch. Will there be multiple endings based on the routes and choices you picked?

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Well, give him some time and I'm sure Ehlly will kick some ass. Also yeah, there will be many different endings.

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But out of the three, I like Ikalis more

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is the tree godesses are human like?

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Yeah, that's the most used representation of them, but no one knows for sure.

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Really enjoyed the VN so far! I honestly have been getting quite into it, I find myself getting angry at Roderick and Ruby on behalf of Elly, and in the end I really wanted Elly to serve Ruby a slap back, though I understand why he didn't though, heheh-
Would love to see what happens in the next build!

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I'm really glad that you liked it mate. Thanks for reading.

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Eyes not of any known color huh. 3 main characters each with different color.. I sense a multi class mc!

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Excellent VN! It has a lot of potential and was an insanely good read. The only problem I see is the various amount of grammatical and punctuation mistakes. Various. I'd gladly help you fix all of them, but you probably wouldn't feel comfortable with a stranger doing that XD. If you're okay with that, just let me know! Keep on fighting the good fight!

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Hiya! First let me thank you for your comment, I appreciate it a lot. Second, please, if you have seen errors in the writing please let me know and I'll try to correct them, you would be helping me a lot dude.

Great! It'll take a day or two because I'll write them all down and suggestions on how to fix them. I'll write them down on Word or Notes because there's quite a few of them. I don't mean offense, but I am guessing English isn't your first language? How would you like me to send it when I am done? That's my only concern.

This is awesome, thank you so much! And yeah, english is not my first language, that one would be spanish. If you want send me a private message to my twitter and then I can give you my telegram or discord, whichever is better for you. ^^

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Liked the vn, hope there's update soon

uh the characters float a little

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First chapter didn't disappoint, good job.

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Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it.

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You're welcome, keep up the good work.

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i really like the general direction it is taking nice job!

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Thank you! I'm super glad you're enjoying it.

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ahhaah no problem you are doing really good it's my honest thinking

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Who are the love interests?

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The story's really interesting and engaging so far. Can't wait for the rest

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Eeyup. I've been waiting for an update. Thank you :)

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what time will it be updated?
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Do you have any kind of specific kinks/fetishes that you will plan to add on later to the game, or will it be completely just SFW from start to finish?

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The game will have explicit sexual content later on. As for the kinks, I'll let you guys find out for yourselves ;^3

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From the way you worded that, I suppose all the kinks/fetishes will be a pretty interesting surprise later on but if it wouldn't be too much trouble to ask along with possibly not revealing too many spoilers to your VN could you possibly say whether Vore or Mpreg will be a part of this in some shape or form?

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pecs job and getting cuffed for knight, pits sniffing and foot fetish for archer, and tentacle pron and getting whipped for mage kink

lastly, FOURSOME with 3 of them.

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Haha there will be no extremes kinks, but I'm pretty sure you will enjoy the sex scenes. Thanks for reading!

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Hey is there any update on your progress I am really excited to see more

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Yep. An update is in the cooking ^^ You'll get to see more soon 

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